http://darkwriter69.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] darkwriter69.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] isthisthelasttime 2007-10-24 05:54 am (UTC)

I really, really, really liked, no loved this. I especially loved how dark it was, and how much you showed Michael's collapse into insanity. Best of all was the use of 'bird-guy'. LOL. Just loved that. FANTASTIC.

The best parts/lines:

Fuckin’ bird guy can go back to his sewer for all he cares.
He’ll just not pay attention harder.
Hey, maybe Mahone’s Michael’s guardian angel.
Yeah, and the fuckin’ bird-guy is the Messiah.

But best of all was the final two lines:

Sara’s head was in that box and Michael’s may as well be.
Didn’t he say that everything was just too easy?

Well done.



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